Possible continuation?
Chroma Haven (demo) » Devlog
So I am considering adding onto the demo some more and with the lower scale of the project and heavier focus on story telling it would be a more possible for me to work on the project in general but I do need a few more supplies to work on it that I'm hoping should arrive in the next few weeks or so
so if you want more please just leave a comment and let me know any and all feedback is welcomed hell even encouraged as I want this project to actually work and go through properly
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Chroma Haven (demo)
a short demo for a future visual novel set in a cyberpunk style focused on writing and charecters
| Status | Prototype |
| Author | Aaron's artist nook |
| Genre | Interactive Fiction, Visual Novel |
| Tags | Furry, LGBT, Singleplayer, Story Rich |
More posts
- Future of ChromaJan 16, 2024
- Fully completed updateJan 12, 2024
- Future Update/FeaturesJan 03, 2024
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I have some bland advice/thoughts.
First thing right off the bat is proofreading and editing, there are quite a few mistakes. If the intended mood is dark and serious, then I believe clean text will help in accomplishing that. The other thing I thought of with the text would be messing around with the font, see if anything else looks cooler, fitting in with the theme a bit more.
Other than that, try differentiating the character's ways of speaking a tad more, according to their character. A couple short examples: "You're, You are, Yer'," and "Gunna, Gonna, Going to,". With those, Yer' and Gunna are sort of crude, You're and Gonna are sort of casual, and You are and Going to are a bit less casual. Again, general, boring, not exactly profound or even correct all the time, but point is, it changes the vibes of a character. Who are they? How do they talk?
Then again, I don't have much to go off of here, with... hm, 4 characters? A couple pages of text? And it's not as if it's atrocious and I can't tell who's who. It's just that the decently important researcher and the random wolf bro sounded quite similar, at least in my memory.
Also the file name is "TheRose", I thought it would've been named "Chroma Haven", but eh.
Anyways, have fun with the project! I dunno what those supplies are, but hope they arrive soon!
(^w^)
yes yes yes!!!!! thank you so much for the feed back
you literally have given me motivation to work on this more
so with what you said that I want to just make sure I understand correct is
- new possible font (that might be a bit hard I've never done it before but I'll see what's possible)
- more personality for the charecter (totally get it I'll go back and look into the writing see if I can change it around)
- and finally grammar and spelling stuff (It was only a rough draft when I made it so you commenting that is kinda funny as it was never proof read in the first place)
if you think I could improve anything else at all please let me know!!!
Just go at a pace you can keep up with, and remember why you want to do what you do, to make what you make. It doesn't need to be a logical reason or anything, maybe for fun, maybe it just feels right. Whatever you have with yourself will keep you going when you don't have motivation from anyone else.
Oh, and read other people's similar stuff for inspiration.
Ganbatte! ;D